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(That was amazing-derful…)
(I don’t have time to read kumquats right now but Mason that was superb. Probably one of my favorites thus far. I love that part of Percy Jackson they are in the locust casino right? Haha it was great ?? good job)
(Ooh, another villain.)
(Indeed Wiley. Indeed Carrot.)
(“Once he embraces loses his mind” yeah, I’m gonna need to fix that when I get back home in a few hours)
(It was gripping despite the mistakes! I really enjoyed it.)
(I may have accidentally implied that Peter isn’t remembering things in chronological order with the whole “we’ve put him through six simulations thing.” Or maybe Peter has been under for even longer than he’s realized and the hotel scenario was broken up into pieces. There’s a couple of different directions you can go with this.)
(Itâs like Inception… What if everything weâve had up to this point has been a simulation… How do we know if anything is real…)
Josiah sat up with a head ache. He was in a boat, he felt ropes squeezing his wrists and ankles, and something over his mouth. He wondered where they were. Unable to sit up and barely able to open his eyes he squinted and and made out two figures along his side and a dark masked figure standing and guiding the boat with a long pole. As his vision focused he realized he was with Kye and Mason. The unknown masked man looked very determined to do… something. Kye started shifting. Josiah kicked her leg to wake her. If she could shapeshift into something smaller and escape the ropes and free mason and Josiah they could escape. She could even defeat the masked man. Josiah looked at Kye hoping to get his thought to her bye eye contact. She seemed to have the same idea but she acted like it was impossible. Kye struggled but realized that there was something different around her neck. A purple necklace. It must be restricting her powers. Who was this man? The masked man saw two of them waking.
“Aw so you have decided to join me now have you? In just a moment we will be to the place where I can teleport you. I am taking you somewhere. I’m afraid you won’t like it much. But maybe if I do it Kristen will love me!”
The masked man could hear Kye trying to speak so he removed their mouth cover.
“Who are you and why aren’t my powers working?” She said.
” I AM THE PHANTOM! At least that’s what people call me. Half of my face is distorted from birth. I put a power restriction on you. I knew you were a shapeshifter by the birthmark on your left ear.”
Josiah struggled but got his mouth cover off.
“Where are you taking us and why?”
” I am hoping to take you somewhere where my love, my Kristen can find you. She wants all of you, probably dead but I can’t do that. This is hard enough. But it’s worth it to get her to see me for who I am.”
” you want her to see her as someone who would give other people lives for his happiness?” Kye reasoned.
Mason is still sleeping.
“I suppose that’s what it is yes” the phantom said nonchalantly.
He guided the boat down a long tunnel made of stone walls. The water didn’t look too deep. Up ahead a green light and it grew and finally the boat was consumed by a warm glow of green light and
POW!!!
They were somewhere else. On a green hillside with Kristen sleeping in a hammock. The phantom laid a rose next to her. “Sleep well my dear and when you wake you will have my gift.”
The phantom turned to Kye and Josiah and gave them sleeping gas and they fell fast asleep…
(âMason was still sleepingâ… Yup, thatâs pretty much accurate. Well done.)
(Haha that’s great but now my powers are restricted oy… haha oh well that was a good piece. Thanks Phantom)
(I have a theory about the Phantom… But Iâm not gonna share it quite yet…)
(Huh. This is interesting.)
(The Phantom said his name was Oliver, right?)
(….why doesn’t Kristen love this fool!! He’s obviously doing right by her!)
(Two rules that I want to propose for keeping the story coherent from this point on:
1: If it’s been more than two entries since a group of characters have been shown and you want to switch the story to their perspective, open with a “previously on” segment so that people can keep track of where these people were.
2: All characters that have been named exist and can’t be written out of the story without explanation. If it turns out that Valdra Muinthel is actually Kristen or some similar twist, that’s fine, but all named characters need to find their way back into the story at some point or be given an ending to their individual story (Carlos the Llama and Rebecca the Cow have been out of the story for a while). You can’t add a named character and have them completely disappear from the story.
I love how crazy this has gotten and how far it’s drifted from the original premise, I just want to make sure that the story doesn’t completely fall apart and become completely incomprehensible.)
(Also, I’d be super into making an audio drama version of this if the story is ever finished.)
(An audio drama of this would be hilarious, and I’ve been wondering what would happen to Carlos and Robecca for a while.)
(I am still imagining everyone doing their own character lines, since all the characters are basically us… One day…)
(Yessssssss!!!!)
(Didnât Carlos and Robecca just reunite with the group with Kye, which was basically exactly when Chris showed up and sucked them all up? We are just now continuing the story form that point, since weâve mostly been tracking Peter and what happened to HIM after all that. Carlos and Robecca canât be far off from the rest of the group, and they will [hopefully] soon be together once more minus Peter…)
(That’s true.)
(Also, where did Brooke go? She hasn’t been accounted for since Chris showed up.)
(And what was Chris even doing? Why did he separate everyone? He doesn’t seem to be on Kristen’s side, so he must have had a good reason. At least for his own intentions.)
(I know why. I need to get Chris to write more about Chris in the story. Cuz lemme tell yall…it be good. We bounce ideas back and forth)
(Ah yes, I should speak to Chris, too.)
(I think he seperated them because if they are all together maybe Kristen can harness their powers to destroy them )
(Oh, that’s a good thought.)
(Any idea why this is “Part 1”?)
(I donât think Matthew expected it to happen like this… Usually when you play this game it ends relatively quickly and you start a new game… But weâve turned this into something much MUCH more…)
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